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This is on fanfiction. Net, called threads of fate I think.
No that’s not chakra. Chakra is yin+yang energy mixed together. There’s only nature energy no nature chakra. You get senjutsu once you mix those 3 energies. Ergo yin/yang (chakra) and nature energy.
Sure orochimaru patting heads on the first day he meets someone
This is bs why would the book say where it was and nobody ever found it
The grammar was off sometimes and coming from reading some good Harry Potter stuff from ff.net this writing style with commas all over the place seems subpar. It’s was a fairly long chapter tho all things considered so that is something
Bro is using too many commas
Usually I really like everything you write but this chapter was weird and not really enjoyable. A bunch of info that only barely made sense but I suppose those kind of chapters are ‘needed’ every once in a while
These chapters are so good but also so short😭😭 I just want to see Lucius lose his shit
I’ve honestly really enjoyed this fic, especially considering that this is your first work it’s really impressive. I feel that he gained a lot of power really really quickly but I would still like to see an actual end for the story. I’m all for continuing this!!
This guy is just posting the work from another author from ff.net. Real story is called Dodging Prison and Stealing Witches by LeadVonE