Knight_Noctis

tftc

What is happening to this story is sad . It was a good one. Now, it's just an essay and most chapters are becoming repeated

I'm not sure why it is becoming an essay

Peak chapter . Incredible work , author san. tftc

It's okay author. Thanks for the chapter .

Well, you need to translate the story well, and for that, I would suggest starting with changing the mc's name and making sure pokemon sounds are accurate enough

way too much unnecessary talking

why a bad word suddenly, not saying you can't use it but it was way too sudden and out character

It is an interesting story and premise but terrible execution. This story at the beginning felt like it's going to be a combo of science and chakra, but sadly, it didn't happen. There are a lot of theories about this and that, but most of the time, the mc just makes it happen with force . There is almost zero actual scientific progression here. There are also few weird characters that really don't have any meaningful presence like yumi . Some weird way she got wood release and the explanation given was mental energy. And this energy isn't really explored as well. It's just there for the sake of convenience . And pretty much going against all clans and the guy is pretty much starting a war with them . This would've made sense if he was hashirama and madara strong where nobody wouldn't be able to defy him which isn't the case here.

incredibly written fight.Tftc