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Why does a general sword skill is race-limited? Does that mean that every level up of the skill is different for different people due to how they leveled it up? That’s a great idea. But if that’s not the case, then you might want to give an explanation as to why a general sword skill is lomited to a specific race, especially since he isn’t some kind of dragonslayer, he’s a swordsman.

I must admit, for something that claims to be Primorial that is indeed rather underwhelming. Although I do realize that the benefits are good, that doesn’t seem enough to justify the name, or is the bloodline not completely unlocked? In that case it’d be great to say that explicitly, perhaps in a system window.

I read only up to chapter 40. So it’s not a bad novel, far from it for a rookie author. Though, there is still plenty of room for growth. First and foremost thing that grated on my nerves is the main character’s narcissism that dies not seeve any purpose other than annoy both the characters in the book and the reader. I have nothing against narcissistic characters, far from it, I sometimes find such self centered comments refreshing IF they’re placed correctly instead of repeating every other sentence. That’s just too much, since it turns your novel from a story you tell the readers into a sequence of the main character glazing himself with a but of plot in between it. Especially since there is nothing to validate this behvaior of his. If the character was more developed and readers saw more of his feats, they may have been sble to relate to it. But as of right now, it’s just a delusion that is unpleasant to read. Eliminating most of this self glaze would elevate your novel’s rating by a large margin since the idea is somewhat good, although up until 40th chapter still very generic. Staying on the note of being generic, the novel has far too many clichès. It’s okay to use clichès, after all they are simply things that work. But if you add too many of them the novel simply turns into one of the fray mass of novels you can find anywhere on this platform, especially chinese ones. Adding more creativity and something new here won’t ruin your novel, it’ll only make it better, so don’t feel scared about trying something new and don’t stick to clichès. Aside from that, the novel has great potential, with some refinement, I’m sure it’ll turn out successful. So please don’t take this review negatively but please use it to improve and keep going to make this novel shine.

Why is there no name on the fusion elements, although Atticus named each of them? Or the emotions associated with them are not the elements themselves?

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