Kingo_Tepes

Punctuation marks! Observe your punctuation marks please.

Like most before it, I feel like this 100 fanfic has joined the ranks of being cringey as shit! From the way the MC interacts with the people around him to the way be talks to them. The author has used the common troupe of befriending Spacewalker and starting to right out flirt with Octavia the first time they talk. Some may say be wasn't flirting but the author did not put the (Octavia giggled softly) if it wasn't intended to mean he...fuck, I'm ranting. I was excited about reading this book for I thought it would be different.

Second, why TF wasn't he fighting back? If he suspected he would be floated, why didn't he fight for his life? It seems quite forced the way they drugged him, the author wanted him to be drugged just to continue with the story.

I was put off by the first drawback. Feral ghouls is fine because radiation, it dinosaurs? Like, really?

I know, just proofread and corrected the spelling mistakes I could see.

Just proofread. I'm writing this on my phone and it is cracked on one side making me use the one handed feature of the phone.