EroSpatula

The forbidden circumcision

*Gasp* the Sacrilege!

I wanna be, the very best!

Apart from Froppy, I want Jiro to receive some love, she doesn’t get enough fanfics where she is the FML.

Soon the dark lord would be known for his renown killing curse, the disillusionment charm.

I thought it was going to be the ‘Excalibur’ stab but this… this is a fate worse than death

The only free year he gets is probably the third year, unless he wants to get a Dememtor trait.

It’s a fanfic, but I’d like to think that the old wandmaker knows that he is new tk the wizarding world.

Soooo… he’s Twice now?

Rating out of 10: 2/10 Tl;dr rating: Honkai as a complaining DID person Idk if it’s me or the story itself but I feel like it’s a bit… eh? Idk how to really describe it shortly so I’ll get into it. Writing Quality: 2/5 It’s by no mean the worst thing I’ve read, it just means that overall from what I’ve read, it’s below average. There’s no pronoun issues (to my knowledge), just the speech quotations are a bit inconsistent. In the first chapter, speech is identified by “” , but after that it was identified with a dash (-) at the beginning of a paragraph for people that are not the MC, which is identified with a ‘’ instead, then at chapter 11, the MC uses ‘“, it doesn’t sound bad but it gets pretty frustrating when there’s 2-3 POV changes in a single chapter. Updating Stability: 3/5 I don’t check updates for books that have lesser than 50 chapters, so no comment. Story Development: 2/5 It’s your typical MC running around with a sentient system and ‘Higher Beings’ observing the MC like a sort of Omnicient Reader’s thing that they can donate stuff too. It starts off at post-Nagazora Honkai Eruption but before the canon beginning. The big difference in system here is, that the guys watching him can also possess him? I get it, it sounds cool, but what isn’t cool is that the one possessed him is a weird psycho that likes to laugh weird, calls himself ‘Daddy’ and give out secrets of the system, and before you say “oh they didn’t hear any of what he said.” B!tch, please, they were like 3 feet away from him maximum, they can hear your breathing at that range. Character Design: 1/5 It’s my main gripe with this story, I get it, he comes from a tragic backstory, drunk, abusive dad, divorced family, and etc, etc, it was mentioned somewhere that he regressed in age by 7 years, St. Freya is a highschool so he can’t be younger than 15-16, so it meant that he was in his mid 20s before he regressed. He doesn’t feel like he’s in his mid 20s. Yes I too, would freak out and b!tch and moan about dropping into the world of ‘beauty and heartwarming’ but please, he’s acting like an actual 15 year old when he mentions quite a bit that he’s mentally 20+, I’m sure the author is in his teens, but having an mc that is 24/7 a thing shameless is pretty annoying, and when he was getting better you introduced “Oh yeah Daddy’s coming into town” psycho boy over there to possess him. It’s annoying, when the MC gets a hint of maturity then go like “Oh well, look! Another problem has shown up that he can’t control!”, it gets irritating to read. World Background: 3/5 It’s HI:3 so it’s pretty good, but it seems like nothing have changed so far in the main HI:3 script. So yeah, this is my overall critique for this story, it may seem that I’m pretty harsh but I’m reviewing this seriously for a good reason. 1. This was pretty high up the popularity list for Collections and Releases. 2. Apart from 3-4 5 star reviews with dashes, emoji spams and the occasional “This is so good! 🤩🤩🤩 Hope this gets new updates quickly!!!” Styled reviews, there was nothing, so I Thanos-ed up and did it myself. So here you go, my honest to Honkai review.