Wake Up to reality…
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Love your story, mate! But there are a few things you could try to include to make it even better. Maybe add a holiday plan for the MC’s parents during the off-season—it would give more depth to their role. Also, try to make his family’s tone more worried when the MC gets injured so that the emotions feel more real and impactful. I’m not a fan of his celebration. It would be great if you made it more iconic, like Messi’s or Jude Bellingham’s celebration, to give it a stronger presence. Lastly, the nickname ‘The King’ feels generic since a lot of other fanfics use it. Maybe go for something more unique and natural that fits the MC’s personality better. Looking forward to seeing how the story evolves!
You did a great job writing this fanfic. I have been looking for this for ages. Keep up the great work.
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