voidravenstein

I was just about to say this authors with this type of writing technique are the worst

how many times is he going to brush his hand against his chest for no reason

naah don't worry it's not really your fault i honestly find it hard to read anything that focuses much on a female I'm not misogynistic or anything, it's just not really my style you could say I have the same mindset as Adrian to some extent that's probably why I'm still reading this, and the story too,cus it's great

definitely not I'm getting tired of her i want to go back to chapters where she was not mentioned at all

I still don't understand why she's acting like a child she was 16 or something when she died,sheltered or not, she shouldn't be acting like a complete child as if she lost her memories I'm pretty sure author is just doing it to justify him not being able to conclude that she's a reincarnate

is it a mistake or in your novel, zombies feel pain?

I really don't know if it's just your writing style or something else but I can see you have a great story here, but I really don't think anyone can read in your style, you take forever to move from one scene to the other it's so bad i basically have to skip a lot of things just to progress a minute in the scenes

this is pretty unfortunate really this novel is one of the genuinely good ones out there rn I hope your next novel gets the traction you want

I don't know if this is just your style or not but your dialogues are so unnecessarily long,it takes more than a few chapters to progress from 1 point to another,all because of unnecessary dialogues between characters

I'm only commenting cuz you asked,i usually don't comment, unless the author is doing something really stupid or illogical so i can say, you're doing fine for now, although I don't really see much diversity in the use of ego but I guessed it will change with time and ranks overall, it's great