changthemhoes

It's great to pass time though somewhat of a crackfic sometimes, it overall good

straight up chinese trash with its repetitive plot lines and its usual faceslapping. not recommended even if you want to waste time

incoherent and incorrigible way of writing, learn to use grammar checker or paraphraser because your grammar is really hard to read

story is entertaining, the mc is somewhat a marysue, the plot so far is good, the writing quality though is really excellent,

ask the author

it is decent but still has many flaws first grammar: the grammar is doable to be honest, if you can tolerate poor grammar, I think you'll be fine. story/plot: the plot was weird alright, are you still trying to make dance of the dragons by killing aemma and baelon? and also your sudden technological uplift is kind of unrealistic, and really around 500,000 to 600,000 in just under 2 years that's just a big fat bull. character: the mc is just mediocre goody two shoes who tries to please anyone, I mean just smaug or toruk can make scorched army to death, you also said that your essarian flying lizard scales are hard as steel, so whats stopping mc's ass to fight, and also if the mc main concern using dragons against slaves he wished to free, he can just use sheer strategy or assasination to defeat the slavers and wise masters, man, plot holes are every where. anyways it's still a decent read if you want a wish fullfullment or a valyrian idiotic power wank

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good and bad but mostly bad, you're writing ain't really for me it feel so bland and boring that i dropped your ff at chapter 14 just for the writing man, secondly i don't like how you build your relationship be it friends, family or love interest you make them feel unreal and forced on the way you write, i know i really have a lot to say because i dropped this at an early stage but i just couldn't read this so much cringeness when i just got back reading ff still think you had the creativity and imagination for one author. goodluckies P.S. a onepiece fanfiction where the mc had no devil fruit is ain't it man.

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god how should i put this, jeez aight, when i first looked at it thought, this looked promising, but it isnt. cliche reincarnation BS rhen wishes, and the dialogue, god, it is so cringe i get butterflies in my stomach. also harem always destroy the story, it is still doable of only 2 or 3 wife but seeing it you gonna way more than that, heck you might even f*ck ever in the verse kriglh. should not even deseve 4 above ratings, ps: you're readers are just brainless muck loser who probably dont get out their houses