NightroPulse

So she want's to look like Kid Buu? Because that IS Majin Buu's original form.

One of the first things you should have described upon their introduction, is their ages. It doesn't leave much to the imagination.

Also, the POV with Charmander this chapter was mostly just an overview of last chapter's battle. All the information given was already recently mentioned and explained in one way or another. Try no to be too repetitive as it can make chapters boring and takes away word count from the story. This novel is already favoring the 'constant explanatory style' as it is. 'Less is more' as they say.

If your not going to describe what might be one off characters look like, try to do so for important characters like Kalia. We have no idea what she looks like other than her clothes. Skin-tone, eye color, hair color and even hair-style should all take priority over the clothes being worn.

Lol, Zenkai*, not "Zankai"

Zankai* The "i" in japanese always makes the double "e" (ee) sound. "ai" makes the "I" or "eye" sound. I say this because you keep making this same mistake throughout this novel. So hopefully this helps you to remember.

Zenkai*

Yep, 1st person POV is just so much better for self-insert stories. Going the 3rd person POV by default route just seems like a bad move for SI stories, and contradicts the title of this novel. While this story does seem pretty good, it currently just feels detached via everything sounding like constant explanations rather than thoughts. Thus, lacking character and coming across as bland and unimmersive as a result. I also can't help but notice that AI might be involved to some degree, other than just fixing grammar, which is probably adding to that feeling. That said, it's much better than other stories I've tried reading that involves AI, if that is the case.

Yes. As is, if people are going to use AI to write stories, it should only be used as an assist tool. Such as using it to fix grammar, or to create sections of a chapter before reviewing, editing and modifying it. Not to completely rely on AI and clutter the internet with (good grammar aside) poorly thought out stories that are full of holes, all with the same obvious generic AI-like style.

And like that, this story is flawed. None of that happened yet, so why is it said in past tense? Not to mention, I get the feeling he's gonna keep the same name in his new life. Skimmed a bit ahead and too much 3rd person for an SI story. Is this story solely AI generated? It's easy to assume so and just gonna drop here.