attrape_reves
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attrape_reves7 months ago發表hi! So I managed to find your story after watching your chosen reaction vid and I love the opening premise! Bless you brother! The only thing I'd add is if perhaps you could add some more sensory language and more imagery to make it more immersing? For example, "In the depths of a very cold and dark place, the darkness against my skin feels like a heavy blanket. Suffocating and squashing any hint of light. Its chilling darkness seeps into my very bones, settling in with an icy grip." A line like this can draw more readers in and it sets the setting. You're free to use this by the way! Anyways, I love the story you're going for! Keep up the good work!!
- attrape_reves10 months ago發表
english is not englishing in the descriptions
- attrape_revesa year ago回復 Hacker_69
YESSIR~
- attrape_revesa year ago回復
Yes. It is. I think it is. Cuz I'm one of em.
- attrape_reves2 years ago發表
Sounds like Naruto. Minus the crushed soda cans.
- attrape_reves2 years ago發表
The mom is...a Karen?
- attrape_reves2 years ago回復 Tar_taglines
Thank you ❤️ and I'm very glad you're enjoying it.
- attrape_reves2 years ago發表
- attrape_reves2 years ago發表
Ambiverts and Introverts alike. Arise.
