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too long of a build up, inconsistent grammar, MC has a weird mindset, odd s**ual assault bit added in, cliche after cliche. I don't know what I'm reading sometimes.

not well thought out at all, childish mentality, lack of common sense, it feels like a random 13 year old got isekai'd and slapped with a system that carries him. Supposed to be a "genius weapon designer" yet completely relys on the system for everything. Uses his weapons, as well as a caveman, would use a rifle as a club. Act's like a scared coward at the first sign of danger unless he has his system OP cheats. If this guy didn't have his system he would have died unknown somewhere after he got transmigrated.

i mean he's using a tank like its a melee weapon, it has a range of 10km, at least go back a few km and use a gun like a gun and not like a blunt stick.

real talk, this sudden romance with "lotus" is so random and weird, you had a carefully constructed novel, then you threw a wrench into it with weird predator vibes and unwanted romance. This isn't cute or nice to read its creepy and offputting.

Had a childish tone but wants to portray a badass mature protagonist, the style of writing doesn't fit the book and way too many cliche's. Background is subpar with typical predictable settings and history with things just falling into the protagonist hands when he wants it, walks home sees perfect member, walks around finds perfect base and fighters. Things don't work like that unless the "system" is involved but the author tries to pass it off as natural. tldr: this book is a misfit of ideas in one.

youd detect the metal on your pants front zipper before you could detect 2 springs...

that night, lin fan entered through her back door ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

a spear can be used a staff... a spear is basically a staff with a spear tip. a staff is also a perfect long range blunt weapon that can let you attack multiple zombies at a distance just by swinging it, even an untrained person can do this. if your talking blunt weapon like a baseball bat, that'll put you in arms reach of a zombie. 1 wrong move and a you'll be scratched or bitten by the zombie, vs even if you mess up with a spear you can drop it and run and still be safe. In multiple zombies fighting you, I think a baseball bat or mace would be worse than a spear as to attack you must be in the attack distance of a zombie, plus it would get more tiring swinging around a weapon with all that weight in a shorter form rather than a longer form like a spear

spears are the easiest weapon an untrained person could use. it can double as a staff for smashing and knock back/stuns, and you can always brace the spear and let the zombie charge into the point. even if you dont hit the head you can still stick it in their body to hold them in place.

i guess that's true, shooting unrelated people is a very narrow-minded and selfish thing to do in the first place- argumentive speaking shooting bullies at school is still a selfish and narrow-minded way of resolving a situation, but as a bullied unmatured teen it does happen and makes sense from their perspective. MC is supposed to become a demon lord, though I do find him quite childish in his reasoning and mindset. From acting like a spoiled child to the demon girl to giggling about killing people he just met in that captive room. I would have recommended a colder MC in the same situation, with a mindset of they're being 2 sides to every story- my side and the wrong side. The setting you described would have made the MC grow up really quick leading from his mother's death to his tragic childhood. Those tend to grow up a kid quite fast leaving all the childish stuff behind. Or an older man who had society beat down on him with a series of unfortunate events leading to his death (company corruption, gf cheating, toxic family members, etc). On a company gathering with all the bad people gathered they transmigrate like your mc etc etc. idk you can make it a family company or something and piece things together. Anyways my rant is over, good luck with your novel!