HeyHiHell0

On Ch.5, decided to drop due to my weak heart. Writing Quality: 5 Stars Stability of Updates: 4 Stars Story Development: 5 Stars Character Design: 4 Stars World Background: 4 Stars First thing I'd like to say is that the author did a great job conveying the three tags on this novel. The beginning of the story is new to me, as a person who doesn't read that much tragedy/dark plots. The author was pulling a reversal on a kind man who saves the MC laying on the road. The unfortunate MC was met with a man that saved him off the road and used him for his own selfish gains. The author portrays this OC quite well. I, as the reader quickly started hating him. Which the author wanted us to feel, as he described the inhumane things he put the kid through. Though, I really like his small thought process on when he was caught and interrogated and left alone. However, this character seemed melodramatic at times which quite annoyed me since I hated him so much. The MC relying on him and believing his words made me want to smack the man through the screen. The only thing I wished the author had done sooner was give us the MC's perspective. I wanted to know so badly how the MC felt at times, and how he felt towards the man. Because in author's case he could write later, that the MC truly did hate the man and pretended to like him, maybe there was also fear of capture of the police since he didn't want to be used by the government because of his powerful quirk. I, as the reader go through these questions in my head as I read this. However, if the author wrote how the MC is reliant and how much he loved the man through the MC's thoughts. Then I feel like the moments the MC and the man went through up till he gets captured and interrogated will become more impactful. Though, the author did write how the MC protected the man and conveyed his reliance toward him. I feel like it isn't trustworthy? or I can't find the word at the moment, but the questions would still arise, "Is the MC pretending? Does the MC truly feel that way? Does he think just like a normal kid?" World Background hasn't been touched upon that much since it's a fan fic and I'm guessing it's going to follow plot or maybe not, but it's definitely an AU since there's a place/street? called Thriller Bark which, I, to be honest, wasn't my cup of tea, and I wished the author would've thought of an original name. Story Development was a bit rushed, as I don't know if the author gave us a time on how long the MC was with the man. Since my weak heart found it hard to read some lines. It could've been a couple months or years? Only because the man found him as a kid and not a baby. Mentioning how much time has passed, would've been nice, as if it truly was a long time, I could accept a small time skip. Writing Quality, it's good, some typos, but I believe I mostly spotted capitalization errors. You won't be pissed about it being unreadable...

I immediately thought about zombies until the next sentence... It's deaf, not death. haha...

Shaymin! COME OUT OF DA EGG!!!!

I-... Didn't need to know this...

MORE MOREEEEE!

Nope, some speculated Acnologia was attracted to Tenrou because of Laxus, Wendy, Natsu, and Gajeel because they're dragon slayers, and there was also Zeref on that island. Acnologia wants to kill off dragon slayers other than himself and deal with Zeref earlier on before he obtained Fairy Heart. So I'm going with this. Even though Kaden did produce a magic explosion, the same can be applied to Brandish as she shrunk a whole island and Acnologia didn't go after her, I don't know what other example I can give, as I still have to review some parts of the anime. However, Kaden's magic explosion wasn't that big compared to what Spriggan members can do and he isn't a dragon slayer.

This arc is for the MC's character development. I didn't want people to think I'd nerf him. This arc is supposed to bring forth the realization of how different the world is compared to how light-hearted the anime put it and at the same time how weak he was. "Fairy Tail is rather peaceful, as it always ends with the power of friendship prevailing all odds." Mentioned in Ch.3. These are the MC's thoughts. He thought he could just "show off" how incredibly strong he was and it would always end in a happy ending. This FF is going to get extremely dark towards the middle and end. Pichu's death was just a demonstration. Know it's reasonable too, as the Oracion Seis has killed many people and Cubellios was trained to kill since she was a baby. Pichu was only recently hatched and was spoiled by Kaden. There was no way for Pichu to win that fight. In Ch11/15? I think was it, where the MC realizes that Brain was stronger than he thought he was. This is an example of the power levels of the enemies he will face, and that they will be stronger than the anime. I don't want to say anymore because I'm afraid I might spoil. You don't have to read it if you don't like it. Thank you for the support.

It was explained in ch8... well it's titled ch6. That bonds can die and be respawned after a day.

Author a sadist

GIVE ME MORE!