Ryleigh_Sarkissian

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GOOD START 1010101-01

The constant use of "author notes" really takes me out of the story. How about use less next time?

Good start on the story, you should try and focus on fleshing out the world and story abit more.

Thanks for saving my time! x14

Good until chapter 10 then it went downhill. Truely wasted potential. The memory loss is implemeted in a very bad way and ruins the whole story as a whole. Feeling sad now.

As soon as you tell that your from another world it just ruins the story. Its a immediate turn off. It just ruins the story. Good start otherwise but im gonna stop here.

Ah okay. Its ok but but tone it down abit as it ruins the story.

Starts off good but about a quarter way through it just begins to get really gay and sexual. The story is ok but the gay sexual dialogue makes me cringe.