Kurt_van_Bragt

So i'm confused is Razukan a so to say good guy or bad guy?

Like the new book! Altough i think the first chapter is still from the former book.

weren't there six chapters?

it changed multiple times now through out the book.

Hey, you should reread this chapter, some centences are cutt of only to reappear 4 to 5 lines later. I think you made a mistake when copying the tekst when fixing the grammar. But so far, I really really like the book!

When will you revisit the home country of Sera? As it has been a lot of chapters since you last mentioned it. Also is there going to be a update of the novgordian "Hero's/summons"?

its a really good book, the character development is really great. The writer knows exactly how get tou as reader immerserd in not only the story but also in the world behind the story. Altough there haven't been new updates on the story, it is still worth reading this as it is just such a good book.

The fish after inhaling air

I think you mean eyes as dark as their fur istead of eyes as darks as their eyes.

I would change amateur runner to beginner runner. As he is basiscly already a runner.