hibiscus_lamp

hello, author here :). this is my first time writing a story to show others, but I am very much passionate in making it an enjoyable reading experience. thank you for taking the time to check my story out!

Not too many chapters out at the moment, but thoroughly enjoyed what has been released. The action scene in the first chapter hooked me in, with a thrilling car shootout. Keep up the good work Author!

There's only one chapter out at the moment, but I can say that I love guilty pleasure stories such as this. Sure, there's many fantasy VRMMO stories out there, but not all of them are executed well. With the beginning lines of this novel, there seems to be some promise here. Keep on writing!

Not too many chapters out yet, but I'm looking forward to Gandalf's adventures along with the protagonist. The world-building already looks promising, and I hope for more soon! Rogersberg, here we come!

I like that you're incorporating both cultivation and magic into this story, and although not too many chapters are out yet, I hope you'll be able to pull it off successfully. :D

Hello Author, I can tell that you've put a lot of thought into this world that you've created. The Royal Academy of Chess is kind of a silly concept if you think about it, but giving it a tone of seriousness with majestic descriptions and a storied history(AKA the Emperor Hero) works very well. I love the application of strategy to supernatural elements, and the characters all seem very alive and real, in no short part due to their attention-grabbing names. Although there aren't too many chapters out yet, I would recommend this webnovel if you're interested in a weak-to-strong progression with incredibly rich worldbuilding!

This story is well-written, with only minor capitalization errors/slightly confusing syntax choices. Still, for the most part, it reads well which is an important factor for any piece of writing. I enjoyed the fantastical descriptions of how Cain got his inheritance, and the fight scenes of him being a badass are fun. Personally, I would like for the exposition to be spread out a little more as to not make it too much of an infodump, and would prefer a more gradual power-scale. However, if you're into OP MC's that take what they want, then this is definitely the story for you!

Solid writing quality which makes the story a pleasure to read, and I especially like how animated some of the characters get - Cynthia's anger-filled internal monologues are very entertaining :-). If you're into well-written romance and assertive female leads, this is definitely a story for you!

I've just finished the prologue, but I can already tell that the story has promise. The main issue most webnovels have is readability. This problem comes before any other factor, and encompasses grammar, syntax, diction - how well the story flows. This story already stands out by flowing smoothly, and having a prologue that pulls you in RIGHT AWAY! Only a few chapters in, and I'm already invested in Renji's tale, and if he'll be able to survive the Death Dungeon..(and what those EX system skills mean!) Nice job Sir Author!

The prose flows super smoothly, and the dialogue makes sense. Very good grammar which is already a huge plus, because the story itself is very readable. The characters themselves have motivations, and act based on those motivations -> Main protagonist becomes stronger because they were so weak, and gets her 'revenge' on those who slighted her. I think that the story kind of read like a fairytale, and I wasn't too sure of when timeskips were going on or not going on, but aside from some clarity confusion, the serial has a solid beginning. Can't wait to see how the Academy is handled!