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well yeah that makes complete sense
I'm fine with some systems in fanfics but this one feels the most arbitrary We were able to see some results of the MC's labor with his battle with Gary Then the system just instantly comes in and it'll make many of the MC's future battles somewhat pointless (I used to be a person who didn't care if the mc used a system but with the flood of systems everywhere and many of them just (as you say) spoon-feeding the MC's everything they can want and more but that gets tiring after the 100th time)
Exactly there's no need for it at all especially since he was already improving before the system however as this is a translated novel a system is practically the norm even when not needed
it's only a poison gym for now to attract attention (and that many trainers don't usually go against poison trainers ) His gym however is a mixed type in the future
that's pidove
idk if it's been changed but currently there's no 'No harem' tags the closest i see is a 'nonhuman' tag Also if there's a 'No harem' tag and no 'romance' tag it'll be safe to assume there's no romance adding a 'harem' or 'no harem' tag is somewhat important as a lot of people on this app base whether they will read that fanfic (or novel) on that tag alone
no one's denying that however it is a fact that Thor relies too heavily on the hammer and not his own capabiluities
I understand that and many of his projects are completely understandable the big one though was the Jupiter base with several kilometers of space (as in the materials needed themselves as the space inside can be expanded with magic with 100% makes sense) However that point can obviously just be a my lack of understanding of HP magic (I know the big ones but not knowledgeable on many or it could be an original spell you created which will also make sense) I'm willing to concede on that point though
to give an example on what it feels like Imagine the Scrooge story (rich, old, stingy man who hates Christmas and spending money) We're introduced to Scrooge in the beginning but the 3 spirits of Christmas are never seen and suddenly Scrooge is this happy guy who's spending money and celebrating Christmas Without the 3 spirits of Christmas the change of characterization of Scrooge is extremely random and feels very forced
i understand that you wanted a reason for your MC to connect and communicate with someone else And with a loner MC it'll be pretty hard to do so without it being forced I believe the issue was that this forced relationship happened too quickly and we didn't have enough time to learn the MC At first we learn the MC has no friends or family and doesn't talk to anyone and the Mc doesn't seem to give any indication of that affecting him (talking to himself, making something he communicates with, no signs of doing anything crazy/dangerous he seems content with the way his life is going) and when Tony was kidnapped he had 0 inclination of trying to help him, but then suddenly out of left field we learn that he's been looking for his father all this time, and when he finds out it's tony he drops the idea of staying out of the MCU events to help Tony and include him in many of his plans/ideas (while he didn't tell him a lot of things and is still secretive it's still a 180 from his previous attitude of staying low) Maybe a few more chapters earlier on to show his characters more or another pov of another classmate who went to the same schools growing up witnessing the MC grow up and trying to talk to him (maybe you can have the pov show some signs of the MC's loneliness that the Mc himself isn't aware of or something)