TheDragon1231

Hmm... It was fun reading the novel. The world-building and characters seem to me to be good. As far as I have managed to read, I have loved it. I can only say that you did a good job :D

It's off to a ... very exciting start. The plot is easy to follow and entertaining. I will keep up to date on future chapters to see what else the plot can bring. :D

*"I can't help it.! It's so delicious!" Said the girl between chews. When she finished chewing and passing the food, she spoke "My friends told me yesterday to go play in the central square, can I go?" she addressed her parents.* Corrected. Thanks

corrected :D

Well, if a successor is not found, he or she will be in the position until the Master is not fit to continue holding the position, that is, if he/she reaches a very advanced age or suffers from some disease that prevent continuing with the charge. And, therefore, the position will remain empty, which could generate an imbalance of power. Although, it is also possible to select the best soldier in the army to have the post of Master in case there is no defined successor.

Well, when I translate "girl" or "boy", everything is translated as "kid" which would be a general translation for both genders. I'll change everything to "girl" to be more specific. Thanks

A head In other words, she is taller by a difference of about 16-18 centimeters

Two words: Totally amazing. The prologue was enough with that final question to get my attention on the novel. I have had mixed emotions as I read. Very few novels have made me feel this. You did a great job writing the plot of this novel :D

Huh... interesting...