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I commented only after thinking About Narsimha and Prahlad's father. Or even Bhishma from Mahabharata.
Yep. ORV (Omniscient Reader's Viewpoint) Hey, I clicked on your account (hoping to find out if you are an ORV fan) and I saw that you read a lot of books. So would you read mine, if it's possible...?
The story is really interesting and captivating! I liked how you described every little detail and how you did your best to make readers understand the timelines. The plot is really intriguing and I hope you keep writing this great work author!
So many characters... Now who is Kevin's father!
I think I get it (though I may be wrong) In the first chapter I get that Nilos have a daughter named Jasmine (I haven't discovered his wife yet), And Jasmine must have been a little girl at that time. Henry and Rose are married. Orion had a pregnant wife who was injured, which isn't introduced yet. And after a generation has passed Jasmine (Nilos' daughter) has a daughter and that's Jessica. Am I right..?
Everything was put in the right place and it was easy to understand the story. The plot seems promising and despite just some minor grammatical errors, the story is intriguing. I hope you keep it up, author!
I didn't get the plot after reading the synopsis but the first chapter was a blast and I think I can guess what's going to happen. The story is still in its early stages so there isn't much to say but you have a great writing style author and I hope you keep it up!
Truthfully speaking, I really really liked your fighting scenes. I loved how you portrayed the emotions of Gyun and how the story developed. It's really great that you put your experienced knowledge into your novel. I hope you keep it up, author!
Your advice for a new author was really great but sorry I can't let any of the options you suggested happen. :(