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Ah, I see. Now that makes some sense!
Wow, this sentence is too long. Please make it there sentences or more, it's easy to read that way
I like how the writer could tell a scene vividly and how natural the dialogue are. But what bothers me a lot is the logic. I mean... The MC murdered her boyfriend and... Well, it might be just a differ sense of taste haha
The writing is good, but the logic really bothers me haha.
Wait... The MC murdered her boyfriend, right... Then, why it was shrugged off like nothing?
Oh no, the MC is too strong emotionally. I think it might not be my cup of tea...
Wow so long, please make it two or three sentences, it helps the reader
Very nice, I like the story progression. though through the first 5 chapters, I haven't seen a correlation between the prologue and the rest chapters. The writing is nice, but it might be better if you avoid brandishing the paragraph with long sentences and keep some straightforward.
Wait, whaaaatt? I find it hard to believe the logic here. They were hostile but then begged Raizel help? Why?
Typo, do not use ' for a dialogue, but "