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Shikaku*

Player Who Returned 10,000 Years Later

sigh...i was reading this just because it might not be the same as the other Mushoku fanfiction but well it wasnt.Same old shit as they say...But hey at least you didnt build up 40chs of romance with Lilia just for her to still fk Paul(read one like that shii traumatised me).

Its not really assumptions though, at least not entirely. The Bleachverse scales at a low multiversal max while One Piece is Low Planetary(and this is taking into account Imu and Joyboys mystery strengths.)

I quite like the cultivator snippet story and honestly think it deserves its own Story.It has a lot of potential. Grammar and storytelling are great as always.

Difference in experience and comprehension

monsters* he slays or has slain would be better

her* horrible husband

Well in my opinion the story has potential, like a huge amount of potential but its so poorly executed that it makes me sad while reading it. Firstly the Mc is completely spineles(im exageratting a little here but anyway).Basically the Mc's mother is one of the "Big Bad's" and she basically forces him to alienate his friends and loved ones because if he cares for anyone she will kill them.She also has this big terrorist organisation that dies her bidding, so naturally the Mc is completely helpless against her and must continue to act retarded(push away his loved ones) in order to keep everyone safe....now heres the part that bothers me. The Mc's mom is not the Srongest bad guy. In fact there are many beings that are stronger then her.Beings that the Mc could potentially use to deal with his mother. How you may ask? Well its really simple...The Mc has knowledge from the game that hes transmigrated in(i think..this shit is so convoluted im fkn having a seizure tryna understand it) he does jack shit(exept in the begining) with that knowledge. Now the author was probably trying to write a sad story about a boy sacrificing everything for his loved ones but honestly this is just like one lf those trashy japanese mangas that constantly tease ntr(though i know this doesnt have it...i hope it diesnt change). Why he cant just strategically tell someone what he going through i dont get(ive chalked it up to either the mc or the author being retarded though im starting to believe both are at this point).Before you say that hes being monitored by his mother, his friends would be dead if he was because he quite clearly cares about them.Anyway my advice? Make the Mc smarter.