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i only read the first 5 chapters so my review may not be too accurate for future development. Overall, i think this novel is good with the battle phase, there is explanation so you won't feel lost and mc from weak to strong. Though, a criticism i have is the way the explanations are given. I don't know how to explain it in detail but its like the info is given too straightforwardly and it would be better to be more subtle. And the theme looks a bit too similar to the novel's extra with the mc using a gun though maybe the story will be completely different later. I hope that the fact that there are 'higher-existences' and 'transcendents' will later play a role in the story. i think it will be a good read for newcomers.

Guess i got too emotional sorry man

wowowow wait a minute i won't let you slander me like that. Hats off. Let me tell you, your rebuttal as the why things happens was the most simple minded, one dimensional thing i ever saw. I always wondered why wuxia authors were like that and now i see the problem is their lack of creativity and insecurity. You say no one would dare slander the princess because her mother is the strongest. The common people, the other powerhouse scared of one person like that. They can't stop word of mouth. And you say the queen is the strongest but could not help his child's fiance who she LOVES, get revenge on the attacker. The princess is written to always have been in loved and her mother knew it but the princess just broke the engagement off like that when he was crippled. Now what you gonna say she did not want to marry a cripple. But no, if there were real reasons for anything you would have put it in the novel before. You just creating some trash excuse on the fly because you were called out for your lazy writing that doesn't make any sense. And what about that stupid body power stuff you've been rambling about. The context of power in wuxia is literally MC op, takes immortal scriptures, build best foundation, gathers energy and ascend. Don't make a deal that you're some shakespeare of martial writing. And you insecure as hell, you dissected my first comments, went out of your way to screenshot shitload of the story. I'm just imagining your sorry ass just writing for the idiots new that come read when they don't know how to differentiate trash from good. And you getting mad for the first bad comment on your story. Cuz i'm literally the first comment with less than 4.5 stars. You've been deleting the bad ones i bet trash writer

You know what yes i didn't read it properly because it was just a casual read and i was able to make up what was happening because i read that much wuxia manga and novel. If you don't want to take my critisicm, then just ignore it. There are always people who will enjoy your books but writing can always be improved and constructive criticism will definitely help you. You want more people to read and enjoy your books in the future right ? Bye now

i spent 12 hours reading, 48 chapters out of 314. I think that i should get the general idea of this novel. I read a substantial amount more to give it more chance to see if i could invest myself in but unfortunately no

in realism, its dangerous mostly. Royalty needs to have a type of decorum. Rumors are bound to spread about the princess going alone to her former fiance's house. If pushing it a bit further, there should be mannerism between powerful households like messaging the other that they will come to their mansion for a visit. Furthermore, now that i think about it how did she waltz into the main residential area of the Xie family?? Shouldn't there be guards or something. Walls.

As for the matter of the princess being locked up, i phrased it wrongly. Because she said she would be in her room but was able to leave the palace and travel from her place to MC's place. So escape=leave the palace. Because previously it was show she travels using a carriage and it does not make sense she travelled the distance at foot and arrived/ returned while the queen did not realise she was gone.

Author, imma be real, in no way am i trying to hate on this novel. What i've written are my opinions on way you write itself instead of the plot, so that you can use them when making other novels. 1. As you said, the MC was able to master many types of arts, he was the strongest (means already has peak experience), mastered alchemy..etc. Using this broad spectrum the ways he become stronger are countless. Moreover, since the new world and previous world are 99% similar, he may as well create all sorts of pills to become stronger. He should also have many immortal grade stuff since he is 'close friend' with the Queen of demons, i will assume his status was VERY strong. 2. The fact that Alice can cause females to become conscious of him whenever is lacking. Having read several smut novels, i found the ones where the MC appealed to the women better. Because when there is no big development in the relationships it is too easy. For example, you could have made the MC start dating the cousin and then, to keep an eye on them, the aunt is subject to seeing them doing 'stuff' together. This makes her conscious of MC while simultaneously having inner turmoil because of her late husband. 3. As the queen of a nation, especially a martial arts world where the strong reigns and many greedy opportunistics live in, you could expect other families lying in wait to take the chance to harm the queen and take her place. For a potential plot (i'll take it that she has only her daughter as child since she was only introduced) : you could have written that there are conflicts among the powerhouses who wants to pressure the queen to marry her daughter and take more power. That's why she was forced to break the engagement to avoid xie tian from being harmed especially after he became crippled. That would give empathy for her and us readers wishing for them to resolve the misunderstanding and get together. 4. As for the 'don't push it author' i wrote skulls at the end cuz i genuinely thought it was funny, i expected he had this system for whatever reason like always but the fact he created it was funny. Though still unrealistic. I just want a but of realism in fantasy novels. Especially since all chinese novels look the same with face-slapping and small relationship development. That's why i leave reviews, just wish for authors to create some gems later. When i first started reading i also liked these wuxia mangas/novels but now the stories always feel the same. For old readers we always want something unique like the author's pov where you can't expect what will happen or omniscient POV or Shadow slave..etc. Anyway i'm not saying that this novel is unreadable or anything, its up to par with other wuxia novels. Trust me i read some trash. Just you could always improve the story telling.

48 chapters in, honest review This novel is as you would expect from a chinese eroge novel. The plot is still brewing in the background, mainly his supposed dead wife is already in the new world i think. To be honest, its just like dual cultivation but a bit worse. There isn't a clear goal for the MC. He did say become the strongest but this is a bit meh. To achieve this we can just expect plot reinforcement everytime. Things i don't like are: 1. Even though he's supposed to be strongest, he didn't dish out his immortal grades scriptures to have best foundation and body. 2. The females are really shallow. MC kisses his female family members and they are not repulsed but 'lose the strength to push him'?? Then they start to like him. There is no appealing or seducing them. This is especially unrealistic for the aunt who did not like him before and the aunt who had 2 kids and did not like incest. But one kiss subdued them. 3.The world powers are not really explained. There's already 4 main families written but no explanation to who is stronger. We also have that country's queen wandering to some pond with only one guard 2 times and the princess can also escape the palace and go right to MC family house without the queen knowing. Not very realistic. If you want some smut to pass time, then read it. It has many harem people..etc

well that was anti climatic