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imma be honest I forgot this existed
Like getting tired. The physical exhaustion was wearing on her. I may have spelt it wrong.
I can confirm the story hasn't been abandoned completely, but as it stands I haven't had the time or motivation to keep creating chapters, that and I feel there is something out of place. I truly hope this isn't dropped myself but I cannot write anymore of it as things stand, and as such I cannot publish those words yet to be written. it's a rather annoy predicament I find myself in.
Sounds like a Fun Teacher
oh.
Perhaps this 'mother' was one of the ones who trained her as a child. It would make sense that a older female meant to bring up these young children would start to be seen as a mother in a sense, and considering that person would probably be used to being cold and efficient with killing, it wouldn't be unusual for them to have an awkward disposition towards the children she's supposed to take care of, not dissimilar to how Ceilia views her daughter. If Ceilia is already warming up to Jasmine then maybe a similar gaze could be found between two ruthless 'parents' looking to connect with a child.
Please do tell, I'm not promising anything but I'm willing to listen.
Typos? Save your fingers the trouble, there's a lot in here.
You have some excellent points, allow me to clarify. First, Stat points are meant to be received and distributed passively to grow stronger. The reason for this is because the raise in stats causes adverse effects on the body, Mana overload for example, is caused by the excessive expansion of mana reserves and has had a history of killing people, and can cause you to explode. The other stats have drawbacks too, raise strength too high too fast and the body could pull itself apart from the unusual growth of power, she wouldn't know how to channel it or control it. Things Hyperextension, and stress fractures are still possible, especially so with freshly raised stats. Also with the Mana overload, though it seemed negligible with Alice because she was unconscious, she almost died. The Mana in her body was about to turn her insides out, the only thing helping was her regeneration that kept her together. Think of it like a soda can, shaking it causes the gases in it to expand and eventually blow. She was on the verge of going critical, but her regeneration kept her body connected and stable enough to adapt. Then there is the Poison, yes that would have been a good idea at the beginning, however the arrow in the ankle still was hindering her, and the infection from the wild animals wouldn't have been effected. I will admit there are some things she could have done better or different, however humans are rarely ever perfect, and your author's kinda dumb sooo ... Sorry?
I don't know if I made it very clear, but using stat points wears heavily on the users body. Splurging 1400 stat points in any one area could potentially cause her to explode, and she's already weakened so messing with them may not have as good a result as you may think. She also has to get used to the changes, so the jump in stats could end up causing more harm than help.