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4 years ago

the part where he recites the digits of pi was really funny

I recommend reading BNHA / MHA: The Musketeer Hero, by Daichi_TBR193, since the idea is basically the same. Maybe you'll find some inspiration, idk Good luck writing, author. (Temporary review, as there are only a few chapters)

Currently the story only has a few chapters, so this review may change over time. So far, this fanfic has been the one that has most made me want to stop reading and continue reading at the same time. It's a harem with Yuri, so you can imagine where my idea to stop reading comes from. But at the same time, I find the general idea of the fanfic interesting, even though I don't like all the developments. Also, I don't like how the R18 sections are placed, currently there is one in each chapter, usually near the end, while I prefer separate chapters. Regardless, I think it's appropriate for this story.

ah mano, eu tinha aguentado até agr, mas a quinta série acordou dentro de mim

sim

Ty

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Hey bro, I noticed some spacing, punctuation and words are spelled wrong in your synopsis: "A boy died and reincarnated into Aot world.he got few GHOST RIDER powers . so how he will Protect everyone." If I'm not mistaken, a more correct version would be something like: A boy died and reincarnated into Aot world. He has some of GHOST RIDER's powers. So how will he Protect everyone. -Some spaces look out of place, after period the letter must be capitalized and an error regarding Possessive 's. At the end of your synopsis, you also wrote: "Note : Few characters will be alive who should be die and some characters will be dead who should be alive. In this novel we don't have 'All Eren Way'. Expect My Mc i don't own any character and story." Again, if I'm not mistaken, a more correct version would be: Note: Few characters will be alive who should have died and some characters will be dead who should be alive. In this novel we don't have 'All Eren Way'. Except my Mc i don't own any character and story. -One wrong spacing, you also confused "except" with "expect" (last line). I'm not very proficient in English, but I hope this can help you.

Ahhh vá toma no cu irmão