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Real Review (Ch1 - 136): 3.6/5 (5 Stars as it’s a Webnovel and low reviews are painful for authors) MINOR SPOILERS AHEAD Pros: 1. Power Fantasy—novel delivers on being a power fantasy, at times, with the MC having an entertaining entourage of Undead, expected to grow in the future. Turn the brain off and enjoy some level ups 2. Evolutions—arguably the most fun of litrpg/beast tamer novels, constant evolutions and new forms are introduced every few chapters, if not multiple. Reading about new abilities and forms is always a treat in these novels. 3. It’s a webnovel. Turn your brain off and enjoy some slosh reading for a bit. Cons: 1. Dialogue writing. Every other piece of dialogue in this novel ends or starts with a persons name being addressed, such as “Brother Michael” or “Liv” or “Aunt Mia”. It’s just something you don’t hear in English; it can be jarring to read. 2. Psychopath MC—the story started with what would make sense to be a family-oriented kid making his way in the world. As of chapter 136, he has entirely ignored his family and treats them like burdens when he occasionally sends them money, and then ignores them when they call. They treat him very well—yet MC forgets them (it’s written that he forgets and is turning cold and emotionless, so it is possible the author tends to have character development eventually. My opinion after 100 chapters is that it’s too little too late). 3. Exposition—first ~40 chapters are a slog of exposition with the author’s response being “just get passed it”. Show don’t tell is the name of the game when writing stories. Readers aren’t dumb, give context clues. 4. Time—It’s been 4 or 5 days novel time that has passed in the novel as of chapter 136. The amount of MC power progress is staggering, yet every other chapter is about how the MC doesn’t “have enough strength”. The biggest issue for the MC to get strength is to pass a college exam 3 months later which he (should) already have the ability to pass after 4 days. If he can’t already, power scaling is wildly off. 5. Power-scaling/random nerfs—it seems to me that the author has vastly underestimated the capabilities of the class he gave his MC. Our MC’s biggest antagonist is probability as his abilities have a 50% success rate that provide minor inconveniences as the MC can’t use his powers because his success rate of a 50% ability stands at about 20% (we’re talking a 12/60 success on the high end. It stands no purpose but to nerf the MC when he fails his summon ability and arise ability). Statements like the MC needed to share the senses of his undead to see a fight, despite probably having more stats than what they were fighting, also seem haphazardly thrown in. Long story short, if quantifiable stats exist (courtesy of LitRPGs), it is important to understand mathematics less you have incrongruencies that ruin immersion. Improvement Opinions: 1. Fix dialogues to flow better. No one in the English language is ending and starting every sentence with someone’s name when no one else is in the conversation. 2. Think about rewriting the MC into an orphan. The “I’m a superhuman and regular humans are lesser beings” mindset the MC has had for 100 chapters does not fit the MC being a filial nephew trope. Especially when it is written with him neglecting his family. 3. Remove the failure option on the “netherworld summon” ability. It serves no purpose beyond reader frustration, especially when the one writing about it forgets the ability exists. For no reason should the MC’s biggest opp be that he can’t summon his weak lil goblin since he failed an ability 3 times and ran out of mana doing so. 4. Embrace your MC being overpowered. It’s too late at this point. It was written at the start that bonus exp multipliers exist when fighting higher levels. MC just killed (spoiler alert) thousands of monsters above his level and barely leveled up 3 times, despite his summon leveling up THROUGH THE SAME LEVELS six times in a single rift dive of monsters LOWER in level dozens of chapters prior. It doesn’t add up, at least with the precedence of how long it takes being written already. The MC is overpowered by virtue of his class—embrace it and don’t nerf it. If any nerf should exist, it should be something like evolutions needing materials beyond just his talent points. It needs something that grounds the nerf—silent nerfs expecting the readers not to notice ruins a reader’s immersion and interest. 5. Time—time skips would do well to improve the novel. With how much the MC has progressed, the nerfs ended up happening since the MC was set to become a god in a year with how much he got stronger. Four days for an MC to go from a transmigrated, family-oriented kid to a “humans are lesser beings”, overpowered menace is a bit much. Conclusion: I’ve been quite harsh in my cons, mostly for sake of improvement and ideas for the author. For a webnovel, it’s quite good. Grammar isn’t bad at all, ignoring dialogue, and it delivers as a power fantasy. Give it a read if you like simple progression and fun beast evolutions. Go enjoy a few hundred chapters of deranged MC that has a bit of a god complex surrounded by a vast array of undead (if I see the MC ignore summon synergy I’ll lose it).

I’m in agreement, this shattered immersion when I read it. All of those stats being shared, free stats from the quest, and MC being only FIVE levels below the gargoyle and he can’t even see the fight? His stats should be higher than the gargoyle itself😭

Let’s say he succeeded first try on all 12, this would out the success rate of a 50% skill at 12/36 on the highest end.

The inevitable “my MC is too op already, woops” nerf has arrived

It’s a profession that prints money. I’d be highly concerned for the alchemists of the world if finished products costed less than the ingredients to create them. Adding hers being three times as powerful, she’ll be rich by just selling a few and keeping the rest.

How does this kind of translation mistake even happen.