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Dao_Creation_God

Dao_Creation_God

Lv13
2020-05-16 加入Sweden
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  • Dao_Creation_God
    Dao_Creation_Goda year ago
    回復 Zurbluris

    Sure, time to wait for me then

  • Dao_Creation_God
    Dao_Creation_Goda year ago
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    I will give this novel a solid 3 stars, I like the premise but I feel that this novel isn't for me, but I will also say what I believe would make it more for me. 1st to much slang, as far as I understood it so is the MC's age in the 15-18 age bracket. BUT the slang makes me think of him as in either of one of two groups, less than 10 and over 35. Less than 10 because it reminds me of kids who just tries to use every slang they know to try and sound older. Over 35 because it reminds me of older adults learning slang to try and be more "hip" than they actually are. It feels rather weird in how he talks to himself/us when he uses excessive amounts of slang. 2nd, is he a coward; brave one; or a loser. Which is his real him? Was his reserved nature something forced by society (bullying), and his brave persona is his real nature, OR is this a coping mechanism? 3rd, too little time is spent in his ant-form before he evolves into a human. And I personally believe that even if his human-form is because of his human soul so should it still be too early if he doesn't have any major differences (external skeleton/scales, antenna, etc.) in the human realm, since MONSTERS should be human LIKE not human. 4th, too little time is spent on the system and it's abilities, some skills/abilities would have been fun to see in the shop, how is the cost of skill bestowal decided, is it purely by strength of the parties or is it more complex than that. 5th, when writing about others which isn't in the immediate story/arc, please do that either in a separate chapter or make it easier to differentiate from the rest of the chapter with ****** or -------

  • Dao_Creation_God
    Dao_Creation_Goda year ago
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    I am laughing like crazy, I thought he would be superheroes for little kids and grow that way, not like this.

  • Dao_Creation_God
    Dao_Creation_Goda year ago
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    I will say it like this, I really really like this novel. It is different, it hits differently. And because I am reading Walker of worlds so do I know OR at least I hope I have an idea on where/how the story will go. But I have a question: Is this on hiatus, are you making a giant backlog of chapters, are you having writers block. I am asking because I want MOAR!

  • Dao_Creation_God
    Dao_Creation_Goda year ago
    回復 Grand_Void_Daoist

    If you get a good conclusion at that time, sure, but this feels like a novel that technically could go on longer. Especially since I really like the slower moments, when he cultivates (purely), it goes by fast, which is fun, but my favourite moments are when you spend a chapter or a few to describe when he is studying something which adds to the world-building while also in my opinion strengthens him as a character, not just in strength/cultivation but also as a person.

  • Dao_Creation_God
    Dao_Creation_Goda year ago
    回復 N_0038

    i think "bike" is a collection name of them. But I agree that it is written horribly.

  • Dao_Creation_God
    Dao_Creation_Goda year ago
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    it was really good in writing quality but it started with MTL at chapter 41 which destroyed it.