AlanCee

Author this is kinda lame ngl. The way you wrote your character is mediocre at best. Character development is non existent. He’s an si in the jjk world and the way he acts is stupid. He knows these characters from watching the show, and he decides to just instantly tell them information he knows about them and what kind of help they need. The mc who’s a special grade is on a power trip acting like gojo, playing with his food like an idiot. Is that not suspicious and moronic? He would’ve been heavily interrogated if not murdered by the higher ups and other factions of sorcerers. Also word count is abysmal, grammar is barely average. You can be a better writer than this, just use google or better yet-read the top 25 stories on here and see how they compare to yours.

For those not aware: the author only writes as a hobby, so his updates could be every 1-6 months, just keep that in mind. His stories are usually really good though so there’s that.

This is a really good story, everything is top notch besides the update stability. But the author says he has no time and does this as a hobby so that’s fair, for new readers expect an update at least every 3-10 months. This is just something you can read for fun, don’t expect anything else.

As long as this story isn’t purposefully dragging it’s feet, I’m fine with it. I hate people who say they like writing slow burn fics, when the things they write have no substance or anything of value to the story. For example, if someone is going to shinobi school, you do NOT need to write 50+ chapters of each day of that bullshit. If you’re just milking these chapters for the sake of it then I’m dropping this in a heartbeat.

I’m glad this is updated, this story is a gem amongst these trash fics with no substance and only op-ness/harems. You should try posting on fanfiction or spacebattles, I’m sure your viewer count would jump really high. Keep up the good work!

Another monologue session, bruh.

This is just a fic you turn your brain off for and read for fun. Super op mc that instantly figures out all these scientific ideas and speed force abilities because of plot. If you’re looking for a way to pass the time then this is it. Grammar needs work too, talking and thinking are written the same and don’t make sense, it happens quite a bit in this fic.

Make sure when you use people’s name it’s the same all around, like how you did with the mc. Don’t change a characters name structure differently, one piece is always last name, first name in that order. It takes out the flow of the story for no reason, and also we gotta talk about your monologues. You don’t need to explain everything a character is doing or thinking 24/7. When you write a scene that’s ongoing, you can explain the context of any situation, but don’t go further than that. Show, don’t tell. Other than that, this story is doing a decent job, keep it up.

Tf? Why would you just say you met the Tokyo sorcerers when you haven’t? Giving away meta knowledge for no reason is so bad story wise. This is so typical, dumb reincarnator cliche always saying unnecessary things to make themselves feel smart and shit. Author please write with more common sense, cause this was not it lmao. So far this story is a 6.5/10, needs improvement.

I’m glad common sense came through to your head, I was ready to drop this because of that forced drama shit. This book has been pretty decent so far, with small mistakes here and there, rn it’s a 7.5/10 altogether. Can’t forget how mc is supposed to be a reincarnator but still has childish tempers and outbursts quite a bit(not good writing ngl, we know damn well that doesn’t need to happen).