Blurubin

Now, the author will probably call me rude or anything because I have a two-star review. Well, it's for your own good too, to be honest. The problem with this story is that this story immersion was broken by the lack of proofreading. If you start before chapter 1 (Yeah, not really the chapter one), you'll notice that the author started the story with a prologue with a switched POV. The author tried to be poetic, but no, it's just confusing for us who doesn't even know what is happening. But that's not the worst part, the author didn't even separate dialogs on the second chapter. Yes, there were mumbo jumbo amounts of dialogs on a single paragraph with a terrible usage of punctuation. Then after I went through the prologue (Brute force reading it). The author doesn't even give a damn about punctuation at all, it just sorta went downhill. TL;DR: The lack of proper edit makes this story close to unreadable.

This chapter is all monologue. where's the narrative? where's the dialog? the switching of POV just makes this more confusing