Jlairu

lol, I'll take your word for it. The grammar must've been so bad your's went down a notch just by reading. 🥲. Thanks for your sacrifice.

nothing wrong with the man wanting a finished piece, stop being rude.

😮‍💨 no dislike button.

pov changes are too frequent, it's annoying.

a bit irritated by this whole higher power irregular bs but....😮‍💨 we continue.

"My master killed them." 😮‍💨 You see now without PLOT that would arouse suspicion even more so. It's a weak wolf, he could have just said it was injured and you finished it off. There's no reason for some random person to care about a dead wolf. Instead what he did was give the man more questions, like why is the boy lying? There's fresh blood on the ground so unless he can teleport then what he said would be an obvious lie.

Anyways don't worry about the rating I'll probably delete this when I wake up. I recognize that such low ratings aren't good. Tried writing one of these myself but couldn't stick to it. keep up the good work. I'm going to sleep.

Not entirely relevant, but about 20% of your story. Since you couldn't give me a solid character and plot to get behind what's the point in reading further? Waste of time. Since you're the author I'll justify. Character is down to personal preference, but the story's development only leaves you thinking: so what, why?, who cares. Now as a reader if I'm left with any of those it's just a huge red flag.

That's nice, but you don't have to. It's just my opinion. I re-read it and it started making some sense. I think it's just one of those stories where you need to focus.

If you don't agree prove me wrong.