Gage_Martyn

Hold on the Mc is 20 years old and misty is like I don’t know 13 while koharu or Chloe is like the same age as ash that is like really sus

Sigh it’s good but the ai use kinda makes mistakes like before jasil knows the mc attacked and burned the base and raided main base but in one chapter he doesn’t know who attacked the base

Again u messed up ais name her mother is aria

Same

Will you be updating soon or is this on hiatus or dropped

Now it is getting good may I know your update schedule

Again you have ye kun instead of Ragnar

Hmm I noticed that u should look over some chapters and revise them so they aren’t to close to the book that u based from

Did u base this book of a naruto Percy Jackson crossover called a fathers love

There are two faults within this book one is the timeline if your following the books or movies Thalia is dead and turned into a tree before Percy joins the camp during the lightning thief unless this is a alternate universe. Secondly a lot of the book kinda feels both AI generated and repetitive like in some of the earlier chapters it repeats but with different parts which is confusing.