Allerum

enjoying the slow burn! I hate it when like page 2 and it's like super power I beat all bosses! end story.

So far I like the story but I feel these chapters need to flow more, more descriptions on how they get to places or do things. It feels very short and stuttered atm like. This happened, then this happened. We need to know the in between.

Why rush it? Don't need a 3 chapter novel consisting of MC gets powers and wins /end. Let's enjoy the ride. A slow burn company/kingdom building can happen with action scenes

Great Job so far! I still find it hard to remember the eastern style names. Id prefer unique names easier to remember.

this just doesn't work with a human frame its not faster than running. The human spine cant flex like a cheetah granting the speed.

story's getting good

I enjoyed it but right as it was rolling along we get an abrupt end. I hope there is book two or something. World buildings was good as well as motivation but its too soon.

Ugh I feel this was cut a bit short. i enjoyed the story though. I definitely think you had an easy 1000+ chapter world here

what? we are waiting to see azemo build a better nation and go on adventures. Him and ren can work into agrestial society

Remus is an old villian...already fought like twice