Quake_Midaro

Happy holidays take ma stones and scram

Everyone gas preference Gal Gadot just isn't my type

I might be living under a rock what is GLRS?

Sorry for the text wall but if you read it I enjoy your fic and think it's awesome but it does have a issue TLDR; you've written the MC into a without shenanigans or taking liberties with certain characters dead end she's in possession of a Cursed Ring which she can be mind controlled by easily if Sauron notices her and now Talion is gonna try and kill her whoch he absolutely can and will she is far too weak to face either of them wether it in a battle of Willpower or Combat Maybe but She needs someone to point that out to her IMO she's becoming obsessed with Power for the sake of revenge rather than to Live and move on and taking a Ring of Power as powerful of an existence as those rings are they are equally cursed I understand it was a easy opportunity to give her a OP item a bit early into her story but she's disregarding those she calls friends or family (in the Wargs case) in pursuit of it she's essentially doing what Saruman did when he turned to serving Sauron pursuing Power regardless of the cost She's resorted to capturing Black Souls even which while not necessarily bad in this Context was just her picking a needless fight for a Cursed Trinket she could easily make later on with Enchanting a entirely avoidable Fight that now had her at odds with the Wraith Talion which is an unwinnable fight for her with her current powerset she is utterly outclassed by Talion hinestly short of Aragorn or Gandalf none of the Main cast of LoTR couldn't hope to win against him and even Aragorn is more likely than not to lose that battle you've written her against a wall she can only run from with another even larger wall now targeting her for possessing a Ring of Power all of them are connected to Sauron and he can proxy control bearers of the Ring with few exceptions in which she has no resistance too whatsoever she's quite literally a simple thought away from becoming a Ring Wraith at Saurons whim he's far too powerful for her to even hope to resist and with her mental state her willpower is much weaker than it would be as well I'm honestly curious at how your going to get her out of the LoTR world alove because as is she's a easy prime target for Sauron to corrupt don't forget at his core Sairon is a Maiar while his true form is not on Middle Earthso his Combat Strength isn't it's normal his Willpower can easily influence Middle Earth in full totallity it's part of why Gandalf is even on Middle Earth to begin with

If you weren't so hung up on a stupid mind control ring they wouldn't have died but welp what did they matter compared to the ring right?

I really hope she loses this ring I absolutely despise mind control it's busted and just boring as an ability this fic is great really hope it doesn't devolve into a mind control fantasy that would just suck

Rip the story looked good

I love it so far feel like the child/teen arv is lasting way too ling considering how frequent time skips were earlier on but still good I would say it would probably be best to stop writing dungeons constantly and progress Remnants timeline a bit as the story is suffocating itself with minimal progress but otherwise it's great pacing is the only issue I can see

This foc is getting boring the MC is just boring he's so far ahead of everyone it's stupid OPMC's are all the same and this one's no different welp I gave it 30 chapters to get interesting or anything worthwhile to catch interest and it's just not gonna happen this fic is 2/5 the Smut it the only decent bit the the MC as a character and the update consistency leave alot to be desired this is my stop goodluck going forward but yeah not for me