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Please update more author. One of the more interesting concept. The story itself was pretty interesting, nice long chapters, good quality, and the grammar is not bad, I am quite curious to see how this story goes. Cant wait for more.Please update more author

Why do best friends turn against each other? Why does one become evil? Why do even the best of men do the worst of things? Read this novel and find out!

What do you mean, Author-san?

Waiting for second bonus chapter. XD

Supporting the author. I like the first chapter and the system seems interesting. The only complaint — Give more updates. Expecting the story to do well. Good luck.

First Review. I hope the writer takes this in good faith. The Pros: 1. There is a world building from the start plus the lore. 2. The Protagonist has piqued my interest. He has a past, it affected him. It reminds me of the Seven Deadly Sins but not sure at this point. 3. Conflict is set up early on. There will be both love and war, it seems. The Cons: 1. It needs editing. Not heavy, but adjusting sentences and words to let the story flow smoothly. This includes, at least imo, reducing the length of paragraphs. 2. The Author provides info about the world and lore early on but does so with direct exposition. It would be better if you manage to provide the same exposition without making it feel like one. The story definitely has potential. It all depends on Author's execution.