Suamae1215

wordy/longwinded describes the novel. the author knows how to write well but what he writes is boring, it had potential but he got stuck in a romantic and ethical drama that was boring as hell and writing the review I realized that the story didn't advance enough to be able to criticize it

many characters being inserted randomly + multiple POV all the time = the story is a complete mess, there is no rhythm and the development is flawed (in less than 40 chapters around 20+ characters were presented, there are several plots, the author just can't handle with this absurd amount of information and launches multiple POVs to compensate, as a result there is nothing that holds you in the story)

had a very good start with the story having a good development pace, but after the main revenge plot it gets terribly weak, maybe it will improve but I'm not willing to pay until it gets there, but as far as I've read the only criticism is the excess of mc's self reflection

decent start but the story progresses with many holes, after a while you can't even understand what's going on, it literally seems like there's more than one author and they don't even know the story. it gets to the point of complete confusion after the paid chapters

the background of the world should be more detailed, things seem very rushed too, from the point where he receives the treasure until he starts blackmailing people it seems very fast (the treasure despite being very powerful seems to be very simple? I don't like complicated but it can be more.), however, from the dialogues to the characters it's pretty fun so far (chapter 5)

The fluidity of the story is poor, and the attitudes of the characters are strange, appearing unrealistic and illogical. The main character comes across as immature, resembling a 14-year-old despite being 20 years old, and act ratiocinate like a circus monkey during conversations. Overall, if these issues can be overlooked, the story may serve as a way to pass the time.

the backstory or "event" of the protagonist tends to take up too much focus all the time. I understand that the protagonist has a tragic past (which may come across as cliché), but I was hoping for a stronger focus on the protagonist's present actions and experiences. the author seems to be trying too hard with the dark elements, which don't feel natural

bad initial chapters but after a while the story gets interesting, 33 chapters is not enough to say more...................................................

the author put a lot of useless information like a chapter of the routine of an unimportant character or the day of the mc in a dungeon but if you skip these chapters it's a good story

it's the 25th chapter and the story continues without focus, there's no development and just throwing information