rydertheking

This looks like a really good start to a novel, and i'm actually very excited to see where this ends up. Might be seeing a future top 25 in the site, but it all stems from you writing more quality like this frequently. good luck!

shameless writer review. hope you enjoy, if you do just use your power stones and support by writing a nice chapter comment giving me criticism or just say something nice, it helps alot. <3 rydertheking

Great story, writing quality is excellent and helps me as a reader to imagine the scenarios that you've written. The plot itself is pretty good, although word count quite short but that doesn't matter when you write enough to keep the story interesting. Keep going writer, i want to see where this story ends up!

Great plot, coherent structure, everything flows well and it just makes reading so much more enjoyable. The story itself is extremely interesting, and i hope you continue to completion because i'm excited to see where this novel will end up in the future!

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oh that, not for this story for the time being, maybe if it feels natural to the plot but it probably won't.

no...? i mean it's a male protagonist novel my fren

Sorry for taking a week off. Back to normal schedule! Another chapter releasing tomorrow!

Edited the chapter and changed the route slightly. I usually never do this mid-plot but it was a significant change that was going to change how the novel was moving forward. But I want to write a rebirth story, so i shall write a rebirth story. The plot I wanted to do will still happen, but with different route instead of the one i planned.

gave it a thought, and you are right. changing the "rebirth" aspect this drastically can probably ruin the thing most people love about rebirth stories. going to edit it now and include the plot i wanted to do without doing that. <3