Dimas_Pratama

Thanks for critique. Actually i want to use consistent such as hiro and allen as he. while Yumi and Rina as She. Anyway thanks again for correction

This story is good. I read twice and already keep into my library. I hope that you continue to use simple grammar, because some of them didn't understand if you read first. But that's okay since you'll always improve no matter you got struggling in your writing. I hope you didn't give up early and focus on your own writing.

Up until now, I totally enjoy this series. Especially MC from weak to strong theme. The writing quality is simple yet so easy to understand. And worldbuilding take it slow. So the reader understand a bit about the story. Too bad i want to see a character who feels sympathy to MC. Good job :D

Nah. just been a while since i was silent reader and didn't give so much about review. and this is the first time i give review to someone in global (usually, i read a lot in indonesian language. and always give some feedback)

The quality of writing is good. Easy to read and make story interesting. At first, i thought gonna be overpowered. turns out i was wrong since mc needs effort from weak into strong. Also, pacing is good and worldbuilding needs to improve. But as reader, i like it. Keep it work

I see. I'll considering your feedback next time. thanks for your feedback

thanks for feedback.

thanks for giving review honestly. actually, I made stories to focus on 4 main characters, and each character trying to build up into good development, to make character feels insecure when they got similar situation in real life. and yes, I made complex stories to make interesting and feel sympathy for character (though I admit, some of them kinda messy) anyway, thank you again[img=recommend]

until now, there is no harem. just weak to strong recently.

speechless menurutku. baru kali ini, aku membaca cerita webnovel dengan kalimat dan kata yang kompleks tapi seru untuk dibaca. belum lagi teknik sihir atau baca mantra ala akademi, dipadukan dengan petualangan dan cerita berat, membuat kisah ini berasa real. dimulai dari worldbuildingnya begitu rapi hingga diksi simpel.