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Kaijit

Kaijit

Lv2

TODO

2018-10-03 加入India
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4h

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徽章
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動態
2
  • Kaijit
    Kaijit3 years ago
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    It would make more sense if MC has background in gaming. So all the decision he takes like choosing Pandora Box and understanding his stats. Makes more sense

  • Kaijit
    Kaijit3 years ago
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    Premise sounds unique. couple of constructive criticism . 1. Use some online grammer check. 2. Conversation between MC and his mom sounds to rigid. it should be natural as it's between mother and her son . But apart from that . It's looks interesting .