Demolok

is this dropped?? ........................

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you need to proof read your story you get the pronouns wrong alot otherwise good story

give the Main character a name please ......

you need to keep your timeline straight in the last chapter you wrote weeks of using the branch but in this one you write 1 week

none of the 2 options

work on grammar pls

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the story so far is good you just need to get the pronouns correct

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