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the inference shouldn't be handed over straight. It can be built into the story. an event leads to another that leads to another. Not handed over the 4th wall. I don't want to drift into sleep as i read a fic, i want to be involved. i have a brain and i would like to use it. Myself.

Senju uchiha hyuga.. maybe sarutobi .. i don't think the sarutobi shimura clan had precedence over the hyuga

clark??

i don't see any resemblance between Jared Leto and Timothy chalamet

this is 'hey ren'

i dont really care about ideas as long as what you are rolling with works. but please give pause to emotions and don't just swish through them fast. like that scene in the gas station. if you had taken a moment to elaborate the scene and give some gravitas to the conversation and the underlying tension, it would have been perfect... now I barely remember what had transpired in that scene.

Haori trained under kushina for 3 months, that was when he graduated. Minato came back to take his disciples 3 months ago. So they met 3 months ago. Why is it 1 year now? okay i will stop bothering with these details in a chinese novel.

hidden cloud on hidden sand? they are like at the opposite end of the map.

it felt gay...

what the heck with the constant verfication from Shisui or the yamanaka and why bother explaining to the client? nobody does that. it s cringe.