Ahsodeska29

Leave not live

Crushed not crash

Change your first sentence to "That, my dear Eli, is a word that doesn't even exist in my vocabulary." This makes the speaker's intention clearer. Keep on writing. You are doing great. Dont fret too much. The grammar corrections and editing are there to help you reader better navigate and enjoy reading your story. Keep your chin up.

Change "...unpure..." (not an an english word) to "...impure..." (meaning not pure, dirty or vile).

Change "...claps..." to "...a round of applause..." as this will make your sentence more understandable.

Change "...on the way". with "...in the way." This will make the last sentence make more sense.

Change"fate" (belief in something or someone) to" fate "(what will happen in the future) so your statement makes sense. Keep on writing. You have the idea. You just need some editing to make your intent & character development clearer. :)

Change "...patriarch."(male head/ leader of a family or clan) to "...matriarch."( female head/leader of a family or clan) so that your idea that she will be the next female head of the family will be clearly emphasized to your reader. Keep on writing

Change " Have a sit. " to " Have a seat." Do that your sentence and intent will make sense.

Cut up your last runoff sentence to: "It's been a bumpy ride as those cunning old men from the board were trying to trip her at every opportunity. Hah! She lets them be for now, as she waits for D-day." This heightens my anticipation of how this Female lead will respod to such disrespect. I hope it will be fun.