Sugakookie_3

Is Avril going to be the lady from the beginning of the story? (I can't remember if her name was already said.)

So, it's no longer Fur2?

I like how this chapter ended. The contrast between Arthur trying to keep to his principles while the people around him start to stray from theirs.

I love the idea of the story (the unloved wife of the ML). But if the story was polished it would flow and sound so much better. There are grammar issues which effect the feel of the story. As well as the pace of the writing. I hate to leave a review like this. With a few changes and a good editor, the writing quality would improve the story and background development.

In a previous chapter, he said he couldn't remember if the siblings were rescued.🤔

I enjoyed the synopsis, so I decided to read the novel. I am disappointed. If this isn't a MTL than the writing needs to be improved. If it is a MTL like another review stated then it NEEDS an editor. There are too many previously deleted chapters that still appear ruining the reading flow if a reader does not pay attention. It's a pity because this has the potential to be a great story if it was cleaned up.

Did the author change their mind about deleting ch 18 or did I misunderstand? Ch 18 is similar to the first half of ch 19. did he eat her apple 2 days in a row?

I don't know whether to be happy or disappointed at his way of thinking.🤔

Sounds good, I like the story and pace.