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It's Chinese fanfic so lower the expectations, the inhabitants of the GOT doesn't act like a living being their reaction aren't grounded into the world itself. The MC is obviously Chinese and people just treat him without wariness, it's human instinct to looked at people differently than you in suspicions. The way MC sells thing makes little senses, he should have travel the world a little first recon the places before he commit on what to sold there.
About the canon or this fanfic?, my comment is about the legitimacy of Uzu destruction is by coalition of Kumo, Iwa and Kiri.
majority of us know that system equal strong faster. Limit the function of the system so it's going to Make the story has more tension. My gripe with dungeon is making the character OP too quickly are use it's as a reason why the character growth is slowed down since the dungeon is difficult. Personally if I had to keep the dungeon use it as a training ground to increased his skill or a safe haven to pop in and out like you wrote when he fought the enemies rather than having to farm xp there. Look man it's your story write it however you feel like it, to me the character are out of character and shallower than the original but that just me, do what ever you want with the story.
Because translator pick trash over quality fanfic.
It's Chinese fanfic, if the author gets rid of the system and focus and the character working his ass off to get gud it will made it better. The characters action are out of character, illogical decision making for the protagonist and again getting stronger too quickly. I firmly believe when translating Chinese fanfic it's best to read it at first and if they didn't respect the source material then steal it and remake it your own version.
Chinese fanfic, the quality is so low they are borderline courting death. The story has no tension with how OP the character are. Personally to the translator you might as well take the story and rewrite it. Take the bare bones of the original story and makes your own with a strong MC rather than an OP one. OP MC needs a well written story and I doubt the original book could done it.
Writing is very juvenile, main character aren't focus enough, most words are stats screen. Should have a single page about the stat and only show relevant information about the stats not the entire of it etc SPD is Lvl up by one point. Lvl up, new skill One style sword The usage of dungeon ruined the growth of the character.
That requires good writing.
Good just not enough, the name I could ignore but the story flow is odd. The MC arrogance, the telling rather than showing during combat and how characters interacting is odd. Since it's set in Ippo universe during the late 90's and with MC being half Japanese there's should be conflict around how he behaves and with being a Hafu that would makes the world feel more alive. Not my cup of tea and won't continue reading it but keep up your work.
Then use Romani name or an Irish one to reflect the character ancestry.