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Martial_Pursuit

Martial_Pursuit

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    Martial_Pursuit5 days ago
    回復 Bill_Smith_2424

    About the canon or this fanfic?, my comment is about the legitimacy of Uzu destruction is by coalition of Kumo, Iwa and Kiri.

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    Martial_Pursuit9 days ago
    回復 SpiritFest13

    majority of us know that system equal strong faster. Limit the function of the system so it's going to Make the story has more tension. My gripe with dungeon is making the character OP too quickly are use it's as a reason why the character growth is slowed down since the dungeon is difficult. Personally if I had to keep the dungeon use it as a training ground to increased his skill or a safe haven to pop in and out like you wrote when he fought the enemies rather than having to farm xp there. Look man it's your story write it however you feel like it, to me the character are out of character and shallower than the original but that just me, do what ever you want with the story.

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    Martial_Pursuit10 days ago
    回復 Beast_Mode_7653

    Because translator pick trash over quality fanfic.

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    Martial_Pursuit12 days ago
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    It's Chinese fanfic, if the author gets rid of the system and focus and the character working his ass off to get gud it will made it better. The characters action are out of character, illogical decision making for the protagonist and again getting stronger too quickly. I firmly believe when translating Chinese fanfic it's best to read it at first and if they didn't respect the source material then steal it and remake it your own version.

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    Martial_Pursuit14 days ago
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    Chinese fanfic, the quality is so low they are borderline courting death. The story has no tension with how OP the character are. Personally to the translator you might as well take the story and rewrite it. Take the bare bones of the original story and makes your own with a strong MC rather than an OP one. OP MC needs a well written story and I doubt the original book could done it.

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    Martial_Pursuit14 days ago
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    Writing is very juvenile, main character aren't focus enough, most words are stats screen. Should have a single page about the stat and only show relevant information about the stats not the entire of it etc SPD is Lvl up by one point. Lvl up, new skill One style sword The usage of dungeon ruined the growth of the character.

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    Martial_Pursuit20 days ago
    回復 Jhan_Otha_Ginting

    That requires good writing.

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    Martial_Pursuit24 days ago
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    Good just not enough, the name I could ignore but the story flow is odd. The MC arrogance, the telling rather than showing during combat and how characters interacting is odd. Since it's set in Ippo universe during the late 90's and with MC being half Japanese there's should be conflict around how he behaves and with being a Hafu that would makes the world feel more alive. Not my cup of tea and won't continue reading it but keep up your work.

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    Martial_Pursuit24 days ago
    回復 Randomguy22344

    Then use Romani name or an Irish one to reflect the character ancestry.

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    Martial_Pursuita month ago
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    Rewrite, new book, Pick Rider era and pick top three built story from it. Start with Kuuga make him earn the power and learning about the responsibility with it. Then you upgraded him when Kabuto arrive if you want conflict add the other rider from Kabuto arrival a dark version of those riders. Finish it off with Decade and fighting along side other Kamen Riders defeating Shocker Multiverse Empire from conquering Marvel along with the other heroes and Villains to close the story. If you get harem limit it to only four maximum more than that will be hard to write, too lazy to think just stick to two women. Like Rogue will Ties him to the Mutant and have a civilian girlfriend Like MJ or someone to act as an anchor so he didn't forget why he become a Kamen Rider in the first place. It's all up to you how you want to proceed just throwing out ideas and lessen the use of AI, it's hurt your quality.