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I understand you and support you bro. in fact, the only reason I had written something so long is cause I really did enjoy reading the story. I, of course could not be entirely correct but I swear I only said what I deeplt wish to see in this fanfic as I did enjoy it. and as you said, its quite hard to get the right mixtures of flaws and development for the characters, as I have to admit it myself but I too can be quite nagging in every little dislikes I see lol. but anyway, I liked this one and I am truly anticipating more. though, I got to admit that I am quite nervous thinking that you might end your fic up after killing the demon king. i mean, I would really love if you were to expand the world a bit more, like you know, there are actually more demon kings around the world and that its not only japan who are actively fighting against demons. there are also overseas demon (white demon and B-ahem, just... demons)... just saying hehe.
ah, so can I only read Odyssey here? or is there any other platforms i can read? and are these the only chapters available yet for this version? i kinda prefer this one based in what you said. would love to send supports too if ever I possibly can!
i thought this had over 400 chapters? if You are rewriting it, what would be the difference between this and the old one? care to tell me please?
what? there's only 40 chapter! is this being rewritten?
you think this is good? you have pretty low standards man.
in case you have forgotten but he is not mentally a child...
really? i guess I remembered it wrong. but I wont bother backreading since its quite tiresome. moving in then
i understand what you mean actually. If I was MC myself, I wouldn't bother creating a completely new breathing. I'm talking about as a story. MC just copying other's existing breathing style is kinda dull. the concept of combining the styles is quite interesting but not as interesting as MC creating his own breathing style that that is entirely derived from his own being and complements his skills. to be honest, there isn't enough hooks to the story other than MC being a reincarnated individual. his eyes cant be considered a hook, well it is but not quite a strong hook since its an ability that is seemlessly part of the demon slayer lore. you know, there's just not enough things to make the story more interesting. something that can make a reader look forward to what is coming like, what would his 1st form be, what his 2nd form would be, how powerful hed become using his own breathing. you know that readers would most likely empathize towards the MC or what ever word use to describe immersing oneself as if you are the protagonist. so whenever MC accomplishes something, it feels as if I myself is part of it, when the MC is sad, id feel sad... my point is that, if MC had his own breathing and built it up step by step until he completes it feels more rewarding. and it would also help with character development. speaking of development, MC himself is kinda dull. he doesn't feel alive, he is just a character and thats it, someone making the story progress but not someone worth being attached to. its hard for me to express what my thoughts really are since im not really good at speaking. but MC lacks flaws. not physical flaws but character flaws. fir example, sokka from avatar. he has many character flaws such as sexism, overconfidence and egotistic, etc. early one, we can really see these flaws but as story progress, we can also see his development to becoming better. if he was the protagonist, it would have been a satisfying change to follow. the flaws he had were the things that gave more room to character development. he was not perfect, your protagonist is most of the time perfect, always knowing this, knowing that, perfect at this, perfect at that, which makes it dull. its the flaws that gives a character rooms to develop so if used wisely, it could creat a very compelling story. you should rewatch avatar the last Airbender, and instead watching it for its story, watch it to study the characters and their development. you could get something from there. I just love how they created the characters there. anyway, thats all.
MCs personality os too forced
BS story... eric is like a brat. who ever wrote this shit, might as well stop