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The story is good enough the only issue I have is the incest. I skipped chapters with stars but really. Seing as this is a translation i can't judge .
"Like his father" and "like his mother" not "a". Your english is almost right. You start a sentence but sometimes you use the wrong expression.
Suddenly I can feel the xanxia slowly creeping in. "I your father have a million shurikens". "Don't touch my bottom line". "this sword will cleave the heavens". "The third prince is smart, powerful and have a cheat like power." Not dissing the author by the way I enjoy the story. But I find the Chinese novels effect slowly creeping in wish makes me feel that those characters are out of place. Still keep up the good work.
Perfectly balanced.
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