I’ve read a lot so if I critique your book, just know it’s just tough love and I’m most likely gonna keep on reading... unless your novel is trash and the grammar sucks
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There’s a weird incorporation of technology and cultivation. Shit’s mad confusing. You’re losing people in chapter 2 bruh
I agree. Too much world building, too fast, too early in the story. It’s chapter 2 and we already got an info dump long before we see the mc
Way too many Gods to keep track of
The problem with Chinese translated fanfics is I can’t imagine a single one of these characters saying or thinking these idioms/Chinese sayings. Shit’s so annoying
So he’s retarded?
Naruto went “big chakra go brrr” the whole show. Him being a genius is like if he recreated the flying raijin. Granted sage mode was impressive but even jiraiya, who was considered a joke was able to do it. And only snakes and toads can have sage summoners and there are only 2 toad summoners so maybe it really wasn’t that hard to learn. The sample size was too low to determine. Hell, even Minato was said to have sage mode so that’s 3 for 3 summoners. In the later parts of the war, kurama handled sage mode for naruto in ksm mode. Again, Naruto really was a case of “big chakra go brrr” and not really a genius. Literally no one was a genius in their age group except maybe Sakura and Shikamaru. Sasuke depended on lots of help and the sharingan. Naruto had massive reserves so he didn’t have to learn chakra control and could just spam clones or overload jutsus. You know Naruto kinda an idiot when he had to have a clone to make a rasengan.
It goes kakashi pre shippuden, Sakura shippuden, Sasuke shippuden, and then Naruto shippuden. That’s the standard.
“Lacks intelligence” and then proceeds to LEARN and ADAPT to what the user just did, preventing him from bug abusing. Doesn’t seem to “lack” any intelligence at all.