Vallori
A university student doing student things in life. Trying to get by like everyone else. And I write stuff that makes me happy, and I hope you enjoy it too, *HappyFace*
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Vallori4 years ago回復 Blac_HurbShort: 1000 - 1500 words. Longer: 2000 - 5000
- Vallori4 years ago回復 Kreuz8
No. I have been sick so I haven't been writing in months. Been really sick actually. But I think I will stay on this website. It is too much of a bother to relocate to another website, I realized. Have a Wonderful Day!
該章已被刪除。 - Vallori4 years ago回復 DetachedDreamer
I feel obligated to tell you that; Fairy tail will be a recurring group but not the main focus. Itachi is the main focus, so the only reason to include them fully is if he were to join the guild. Have A Wonderful Day!
- Vallori4 years ago發表
It has the potential to be funny with it crossing so many dimensional barriers to get the MC's crew. But the problem is it needs A LOT of editing. The structure of the paragraphs is all over the place. And from one author to another; Do not put multiple dialogue lines in the same paragraph (it is so weird to read). You also need to take another look (maybe three) at the grammar. There are many obvious mistakes even a non-English speaker can point out. Otherwise, I advise downloading the free version of Grammarly, it will fix most sentences here. Also, try and minimize mixing arithmetic words with ordinal numbers. If it is system-related you can use; 1, 2, 3, 4, like that. But if it is anything else, for Example, age then it should only be this: twenty years old... Not this: 20 years old. There are many things I can point out. But here is a summary: - Shorten paragraphs. - Limit the use of arithmetic words, instead go with ordinal numbers. - Check grammar more than ones (use Grammarly) - Do not put two different dialogue-lines of two different people in the same paragraph. I hope this helps. Have a Wonderful Day.
- Vallori4 years ago回復 Murdock007
Happy you think so. That is why I write it, I fine it relaxing. Have a Wonderful Day!
- Vallori4 years ago回復 CodeZeroZero
His predecessors are. He is not (yet).
- Vallori4 years ago回復 CodeZeroZero
Yeah, I sincerely believe this is nothing for a powerful shinobi. Have you seen the kind of stupid physics-destroying things they do in this show? Also, this is just for fun, don't overthink it. Just enjoy it if you enjoy it.
- Vallori4 years ago回復 oceansage
Trying to demonstrate Hiruzen's badassness. Also, I don't really care how my MC looks. I don't think he looks bad, I think he is demonstrating a realistic mentality. It won't change, so get out now if this annoys you. To save us both future headaches. Have a Wonderful Day!
- Vallori4 years ago回復 WhyAmIStillHere
I don't know. No love, I suppose. I am not planning any of this just writing whatever. We will see what happens. :)
- Vallori4 years ago回復 amaturewriter
No. I just take my time with my stories. I write when the mood is right. And I have a few chapters done - unedited.
