The Desire Demon

So it's your boi the author, so I'm commenting on this novel to tell you what you will expect after writing 15 chaps: Bad: 1- The first chapters will be the worst thing you'll ever read. 2- The story will be so flawed as this is my first novel. 3- I'm so bad at imagining stuff so flawed world and character building is expected. 4-Bad grammar as this is again my first novel. Good: 1- I try to make this novel the best it could be. 2- I (will when I have commenters, sad) use your thoughts to approve this novel as I want you to participate on creating this novel. 3- I'm a very hard working man. 4- I'm a very good friend. 5- I love writing so it's not expected for me to drop this one, not with all of that support. And a lot of other stuff! So please give this novel a chance, and please of you want to drop it, read until chap 10 then decide! Anyways It was your boi FlameCookie. PLEASE GIVE ME A CHANCE!

Loved your story really but you need to work more hard as there are many errors. Don't stop keep going and you will eventually rise to the top😉

I like the story. Even in the first chap the demon is cool I like his wholesomeness like he just said 'that's an interesting human you got there, alright I will grant you your wish' it was as if they're just wishing for a piece of candy. And yeah the father's a trash too. When I hated a character that's when I know what an amazing author you are that made me hate a character. Totally like it.

OP MC LESGOOOOOO! AY, the comedy is great tho. this will be a great guilty pleasure reads for you! The story is unique in it's own way, but precisely the narative. KEEP IT UP AUTHOR PLZ. promise me u will edit the messy first half of your story tho. Cuz the story is good so don't let it go to waste!

I... This is unbelievably good it actually makes me want to cry as a fellow author to be quite frank. There are few to no grammar mistakes from what I've read and the story continuity and general quality is just so good. I'm excited to see this author become a top writer on the website and even beyond it!

HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA..... I love this story, its cool. Like me! hehehehehehehehehhe, I call this self support so dont blaim me..............

Ah yes, a main character with stepmother. Ehem..anyways, the story itself is good. Although your paragraphs are way too long at the first chapters, I ignored that and just enjoy the story. Keep it up.

It has nearly everything your imagination needs in there, takes time to develop, best the best part - It is first person POV ❤️ so better to imagine myself in it...definitely recommended🙌🏻

Very interesting and humorous. I like the pace and the character development. Excellent story! Stay strong and keep writing! Let's hit 100 chaps at least!

The best one so far for me in fantasy. I'm loving the character development of Almer. All other characters are also good but I'm in love with Nira. Hope ML gets the happy ending.

I always read the author's own review first. The author humbly asked for a chance, saying this is his first book. But when I started reading the book, I can say that apologies are not necessary. I love the story plot. and I went ahead and read until Chapter 10, and I can say that the writer is doing just fine. From Chapter 1 to Chapter 10 is nothing but a flawless narration. here is a perfect 5 stars.