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Journey Through Potterverse

作者: xercses
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The journey of Jason in the magical world of Harry Potter with the memories of the past and uncertainty towards the future.. Note: This is not an OP Mc fic, so please don't expect a super smart and flawless person. Mc will make mistake and bad judgement call. ps. I am writing this book because I am bored and although I would appreciate constructive critisism please don't expect me to change the story just because you didn't like it.

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amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4amaturewriter

This book has too many mistakes......ie: MC dosnt want to grab attention, but dude just blurts out how he knows about magic and has visited the leaky cauldron, , BUT it is explained, HOWEVER , its still unrealistic as MC was a kid, and I dont think they'd allow a kid, especially a muggle born to wander around, author should've instead made some BS about MC being a metamorphosis instead, or something else instead of what he did....... Then theres the fact that this dude learned the mind arts by going to knockturn alley and buying books, How the hell would a muggleborn kid with no money afford that ****.... also MC says he knows his fathers childhood friend and yet the MC didnt even know his own fathers name till chp 3.........MC dosnt seem smart nor does he seem as though he thinks **** through...I suggest a re-write and fix yur mistakes author...GL 2 stars..cause so many flaws, not in english but rather the story

Tom_Sky
Tom_SkyLv3Tom_Sky

Plot development is good. The hero understood everything early. He started remembering the plot of the canon early. The hero is impulsive and performs sharp, strong actions. But I like it. I've read a lot about smart guys and sly men who are ready to win the whole world. I think I'm smarter than this hero. But it's nice to follow his story.

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