Game Of Thrones: House Bracken

Put a summary of the book up so people actually know what they're reading. Also don't just throw numbers around, also you've gone straight to lorica segmentata and Corinthian helmets if you know anything about history they are not good pieces of armour compared to medieval designs, it makes no sense.Think your story out first if you're going to do something think why am I doing something, is this realistic.

Spouting random numbers, making one of the largest and strongest houses in the river lands pitifully weak for no reason, switching to armor that is worse than what you already have and straight up butchering the entire way medieval society conducted warfare for whatever reason. The mc did not make a single logical decision in the entire fic.

The story moves quickly and it seems like it lacks a beginning, there is too much information in the chapters and it is difficult to follow the story, the MC's motivation is still not well understood.

It’s a good fast paced fanfic, however it has issues with update reliability and characters not really being introduced well or fleshed out. I hope that the author will finish this, but I don’t have a lot of faith he’ll come back and finish writing it. Otherwise grammers decent enough for a fanfic on WebNovel as we all know most are done terribly.

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