181: Dark Vision

Geachte Heer / Vrouw, Wat een ontzettend komisch boek was dit! Al vanaf dag een zag ik de humor, een volle, spottende ironie, maar toch erg grappig. Met name de verkrachtingsscène was erg vermakelijk. Ook is het gebrekkige Nederlands en de foutieve spelling lachwekkend. Ik zou dit boek een 6.9 / 10 geven. Aan te raden voor alle aandachtssletjes die graag met moffen e-daten. Met vriendelijke groeten, Peter

This novel is just awful. At the beginning a lot of stuff that the reader is unfamiliar with is told and the way it is being told suggests that the reader should already know everything. There is little to no exposition whatsoever. The world-building is of very low quality. There are too many characters and they are all very thinly written. Character set-up or development is absent. The story is very weak and feels more like a description of warfare but not in a good way. Switching between perspectives from which the story is told does not make for an easy read. And lastly this novel is filled with spelling mistakes and has an insane amount of grammatical errors. So overall I would not recommend this book. It is just that bad.

An all star to an awesome book such as this. This is the first time I would read a book with such genre, all it's just in it's 8th chapter as when this was reviewed, it made me feel like I was in the military zone. The dialogues were smooth and easy to understand. I don't know about others but I have a liking to unique names and this is one that has a lot of it. Already added this to my reading list. All being said, keep up the good work.

So 1: Writing Quality: I would give the writing quality a 3 star (Keep in mind that I give most books 1 star), The quality is well enough that I can understand what you are trying to portray, if you have an editor cleaning up behind you it would make it better 2: Updating stability: This one is usually based on Chapters per week, most people would like to see 1 chapter per day written minimum 3: Story development: I would give this a 5 star, the story thus far is progressing at a decent speed. It is fast enough to keep the reader entertained. 4: Character design: I would give the character a 4 star, I think that it would be helpful to give a bit more background on the character, why they are fighting, etc. The dialogue is great for giving us their personality, so 4 stars here 5: World background: 2 stars. As of this point I'm not very sure what is going on, I understand that they received a mission... but I'm not really sure what the mission is. The MC never met the team, so we don't know who is who, we don't know how far away the mission is from the home country, etc. I got the numbers mixed up, but I hope that you take this as creative criticism and improve. I think the idea is great! And it looks like it will be action packed! Definitely don't give up 💪

The concept and the world surrounding this story is excellent. It's not often webnovels like this emerge within this site based on my reading experience. Unfortunately, it's execution needs a lot of rework. For starters, many of the dialogue is written like it's a script, like (Character name):. In addition, there's giant paragraphs. At the very least, the story does have a clear direction, but the overall visibility of the paragraphs (it's script like nature and big wall of text like paragraphs) need some revision. The content is fine, it's just the overall structure that's a bit off. In addition I feel that based on the content, this is not a martial arts book. Rather, I get more war& military vibes. Even the synopsis gives me that atmosphere, and speaking of synopsis: it needs more work. The synopsis is telling me things that are happening in the story, rather than what the story is about. This is the best score I can give due to the atmosphere of the world, which in itself is the highest score out of all the elements of this review. I know you can do better than this author, keep on writing.

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So, this is my first time reading one war based story... And from the first 2 chapters, I can say that the story is worth reading.. Its not too boring or feels off, whenever it is, the author is giving us some good jokes in between.... I really like the way the story started off with... It was cool And I soo much love the names of characters... like they really are very like-able... But, please.... Upload as soon as possible.. :) :)

Looking good so far, nice start I want to see how this story goes. That's all I can say I am adding this to my library to get updated, Good luck!

So far I really like it. I really want to read more and find out what happens next. Please post more soon. The writing was detailed and really got my attention making me wanna keep reading. I am hoping for a bit of character description though and maybe just a bit more description on the places. It seems like the story is very much so in the moment, but it's more relatable (and easier to read at least for me) if there is description.

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