Review Detail of Fisal_Ali in Berserk: Magic And Sword

I think saparting the paragraphs would make the reader's experience alot better, Also giving the side character names can make the story feel alot more alive, And sticking to one Pov instead of switching from the third to the first in one single paragraph, And saparting the mc's thought's from the paragraph with some mark, like"this", or you can make it in italic text to saparting it from normal dialogue. Other than that it's pretty good, it was a bit rough at the beginning but it got better in the latest chapter. (The grammar is pretty decent only some pretty minor mistakes.) keep up the good work.